I was pleased with the feedback on my fourth assignment, on the positive side the first draft of the essay was good with wide research. I had also picked up cross-cultural points and explored style appropriation.
To improve the essay I need better framing, to keep the theoretical framework in focus throughout the essay, to improve the introduction to each section and the linkages between sections. I also need to work on the conclusion section to emphasise what has been discovered.
These are all valid points that will improve the final essay and ones that I will work on for Assignment 5.